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Dear Chip
At last,the rainy season has started in Kanto region.
This time homework was very difficult.
Here is my homework. Please check it and give me some advice.
Thank you.
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Dear Chip,
At last, the rainy season has started in the Kanto region.
This time the homework was very difficult. Here is my homework. Please check it and give me some advice.
Thank you,
Hanako
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| Dear Chip → Dear Chip, | Add a comma after the name for personal email. |
| Dear Chip → Dear Chip: | Add a colon for business email. |
| At last,the rainy season has started in Kanto region. | At last, the rainy season has started in Kanto region. |
| Missing a space after the comma. | Add a comma after the comma. |
| This time homework was very difficult. | This time, the homework was very difficult. |
| Which “homework”? | Add “the” before the noun homework. |
| This time homework was very difficult. | My homework was very difficult this time. |
| Which “homework”? | I would suggest this version. |
| Here is my homework. Please check it and give me some advice. |
| Looks good to me! |
| Here is my homework. Please check it and give me some advice. Thank you. | Here is my homework. Please check it and give me some advice. Thank you. |
| Missing one blank line between the last sentence and the closing. | Add one blank line. |
| Thank you. Hanako | Thank you, Hanako |
| Don't use a period after the closing. | Use a comma after the closing. |
| Thank you. Hanako | Thank you, Hanako |
| Missing one blank line between the closing and the signature. | Add one blank line between the closing and the signature. |
Any questions or comments? Please ask me in class!
Chip
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